Yeah write virgins!
There were three virgins on the grid this week, the most we’ve had in weeks. Thank you to everyone who’s been spreading the good word of yeah write and thanks to the virgins for working your way around the grid. Please join us again next week.
Reader votes
Three readers submitted complete yeah write vote-o-rama tracking spreadsheets and their votes, along with three yeah write editors, combined for this week’s jury panel prize. Thanks, guys, for your commitment and hard work.
Let’s do some mathin’
Real quickly, let’s put your editor scores into perspective. There were six scoring readers and editors this week. So if you take your total score beneath your thumbnail and divide it by six, you’ll get an idea of where you landed in the yeah write criteria.
Intangibles, such as a reader’s emotional connection to the theme of the piece, can sometimes override pure numbers and push the reader toward selecting an actual favorite from lower scoring entries. Which is how editors’ picks very often than not come from the middle of the grid instead of the top.
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- 12 The author meets all of the criteria for a winning yeah write submission
- 10-11 The author meets most of the criteria for a winning yeah write submission
- 7-9 The author meets more than half of the criteria for a yeah write submission
- 6 The author meets half of the criteria for a winning yeah write submission
- 3-5 The author meets few of the criteria for a winning yeah write submission
- 0-2 The author does not meet the criteria for a winning yeah write submission
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Jessie of Jester Queen earned 69 points. Dividing by 6, she earned an 11.5 on the editors’ scale: the author met most of the criteria for a winning yeah write submission.
Stacie of Snaps and Bits earned 62 points for a 10.3, also meeting most of the criteria. Yeah write editor Cindy, competing on the challenge grid for the first time since this self-scoring on the spreadsheets opened up the opportunity for editors to return to the grid, earned 61 points for a 10 on the scale. In her notes on the scoring sheet, she admitted her own post had a weak central conflict which, I guess, the voting panel overlooked or forgave. Cindy rounds out the top row three.
We each take notes on the entries—I call them liner notes since reading the liner notes on a new album or a CD was my favorite part of buying music when I was younger and, as I get the spreadsheets from the editors, their notes are my favorite part of the tracker. For something different this week, for the jury panel winner and managing editor’s pick, I’m sharing those liner notes so you can get a better feel for our thought processes.
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Learning Curve
Jessie Powell of The Jester Queen
Editor 1 liner notes: Jessie has a gift with slices of life. Great scene setting, great dialogue, great characters. A big so-what. (ed.: we love it when our writers nail the so-what)
Editor 2 liner notes: I was so afraid for her daughter—that she would be classified incorrectly. How lucky to have found an awesome person—and to have the cash to pay her. She’s a story-teller, and it was one of the few I didn’t have to force myself to read through. Still…snip snip snip. (ed.: “snip snip snip” means the piece could have used another round of editing)
Editor 3 liner notes: well-paced, suspenseful, I could feel the little girl’s triumph. Solid final sentence.
[divider_header_h3]contributing editors picks[/divider_header_h3]
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editor’s pick by Kristin W
Complexities and chicken soup by Ashley Austrew
I’m choosing Ashley Austrew’s “Complexities and Chicken Soup” this week. I found this post easy to read, relatable, and authentic. From the beginning, when Ashley avoids human contact by choosing the self-checkout aisle, the feeling of “just leave me alone, I’m sick” that we’ve all experienced is palpable. The teenager’s comment takes us by surprise, just as it does Ashley. And soon after, when she questions whether the compliment was sincere of a cruel joke, we travel right along the road of self-doubt with Ashley. The rejection, “What kind of a sick asshole was that girl?” is perfect for the mood of the piece (she’s got a cold, remember?), and her close critique of her naked self in the mirror is raw even while it’s matter-of-fact. Clinical.
What I especially liked about Ashley’s piece was her plain use of language to convey strong emotion. It’s not florid and overdone; it’s just straight-to-the-point. Even Ashley’s breakthrough, her acceptance of the simple compliment, is stated in simple language: “This was as good as it’s going to get…To hell with me…I finally accepted the compliment.”
If I were to work on this post, I’d go against what I just said and try to plump up a few of the more important sentences. Choose the most important lines from the shower/mirror scene, and then strengthen the observations of the body reflected. Do we need the shower and shaving line? If so, make it important. The leg goes from pine cone to plush? The dust from the day circles the drain and exits? Let the reader see the “fat on the tops of my arms” in detail. Puckered or buttery? You get the idea.
Congratulations, Ashley!
Voters’ mean average: 9.8
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editor’s pick by Cindy R
We Were Friends by Michelle Longo at The Journey
In Michelle Longo’s “We Were Friends,” simple flirtation takes a dark turn in a story that never tells us what to feel. Michelle doesn’t fall for the temptation to tie everything up in a neat bow, maybe with a final expository paragraph telling us what she learned from the experience, or how she feels about it now, or how we should react. She doesn’t meander into the incident by framing it as a view of “older Michelle looking back on younger Michelle” with a two paragraph set-up. Instead, she jumps right in with a punchy, active first sentence and a short first paragraph and we hold our breath as the tension builds.
It’s hard for adults to sound authentic as teenagers, and Michelle is spot on as a late adolescent, relating, without embarrassment or caveat, her initial enjoyment and later tiring of her admirer’s antics. But it’s the mood that brings this piece to life. She elicits discomfort in the reader without pandering to us, so we feel the growing claustrophobia of the climactic moment with no way out, just like young Michelle. When the scene breaks we finally exhale, but we never get a chance to hug it out. She ends as she begins – with a short and simply and powerful final line: “We were never really friends after that.” I challenge all Yeah Write authors to follow Michelle’s lead – show don’t tell, and let your stories stand on their own without asides and explanation. As Michelle demonstrates, less is more.
Voters’ mean average: 9.3
[divider_header_h3]managing editor’s pick[/divider_header_h3]
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editor’s pick by Erica M
Pictures Not So Perfect by Cathy at Cathy’s Voice Now
Editor 1 liner notes: Who knows why this spoke to me, but it did. Maybe because the ending wasn’t wrapped in a big red bow. I was expecting the whole “then my daughter patiently organized my life’s memories as we fell in love all over again over coffee” bullshit, but it ended in the same shrug I give so many of my projects.
Editor 2 liner notes: Not the greatest post ever but I found it really charming and liked it quite a bit. Didn’t need to spell out obsessive compulsive. Loved the showing /not telling of contrast between mother & daughter—the frustration and the mild shame.
Editor 3 liner notes: Just fine. Not really a story as just a telling. Less dialogue, more emotion.
Voters’ mean average: 9.3
Honorable mentions
In no particular order, these bloggers were mentioned in the editors’ notes as close runners-up:
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- Millennial Monster
- Kathleen at Michigan Left
- Christina at Finally Mom
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Win-Win
The thumbnails are now sorted in the grid from most editor points awarded to the least.
In the case of a tie, the thumbnails are additionally sorted by page views. Do not be discouraged if your blog has landed near the bottom of the grid; just getting on the grid is an accomplishment these days. The fun lies in getting better exposure for your blog and in the spirit of competition as incentive to improve your writing and blogging skills. It’s a win-win for everybody involved.
Thanks again, everybody, for linking up, for reading, for accepting the weekly challenge. And for making yeah write the most welcoming spot on the Interwebs for writers who blog and bloggers who write.
Yeah write #78 opens Tuesday. Bring your best stuff. Until then, please stop by Flood’s speakeasy for even more posts to read and enjoy.
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I’m one of the virgins who participated this week. Wow. I don’t know if I’m more blown away by the consistently outstanding writing of the bloggers here, or the heartfelt and thoughtful comments writers left for one another… Congratulations to all of the winners! (Though I’m definitely going to take the point that just getting on the grid as a win!) See you next week!
Way to go, all you writing writers! It was fun to read your stuff this week. xo
PS I totally wish you had a top row badge. I’d be all excited to display that, it’s such a big deal for me!
Stacie,
I think this week was definitely one of your strongest since I’ve been reading your posts. Sometimes it’s the subject matter that gets the vote count up – tugging at those heartstrings! – you definitely had the strong writing to back it up. I love seeing people grow in their writing and develop their skills. Well done!
I made her a top row three badge. It’s already in her sidebar 🙂
Thank you both! I am proudly displaying Erica’s badge after finally figuring out how to get it on my sidebar (I might be a bit wordpress challenged!). I have learned so much here and really appreciate your efforts and the yeah write feedback. I hope to eventually write every post as if it’s a winner. I’m not sure I know exactly how to do that yet but I am just happy to be learning! I do LOVE the top row badge. For those that are there often, it may not make sense, but for me and others that are not often in the top row, it’s a nice touch!
Congrats to everyone on the grid and especially our picks and winnters – Michelle, Cathy, Stacie, Jessie, and Ashley! I loved being back on the challenge grid and I so appreciate all of you who dug deep into the spreadsheet to read and score the entries. I learn so much about writing every week as I read, read, and read some more. ~ Cindy
I’m so honored and blown away and happy.
Thanks for the editor’s pick and congrats to the other winners. As always, there was great writing up on the grid this week!
Thanks for making me feel creepily uncomfortable 🙂
So honored to be in the top row (my first time!) with such talent! Congrats to Jessie, Cindy, Ashley, MIchelle, and Cathy!
Oh my gosh! I totally made it a goal to be a pick at some point and it feels every bit as awesome I thought! Thanks, you guys! And congratulations to all the winners, picks, mentions, etc! I love Yeah Write 🙂