This week’s quick and dirty lesson: breaking up with adjectives and adverbs
It was a dark and stormy night. The velvety blackness enfolded me like a lost child crying hopelessly for the soft comfort of its stuffed toy and the fierce lightning and terrifying thunder rendingly shattered the humid sticky dark post-midnight air.
Yeah, that was pretty awful.
If you submit something like it, you can probably expect a love letter from me with a gentle reminder or two. (For those of you who have already gotten love letters, thank you! I know it’s not easy to hear “this wasn’t good enough for the grid this week.” I have never been part of a community that takes critique so graciously, and I am still amazed by you all.)
I know we all want to be more descriptive writers. The kind of writers that can turn a “guess you had to be there” into an “it felt like I was right there with you.” Ironically, the way to get there is probably not with more adjectives. Before you pack your post with extra words, go back and ask yourself if you’re adding a description or a distraction. Did you glare angrily or are glares angry by default? Did Johnny shout loudly, or is a shout already loud enough?
Of course, sometimes you need that adjective or adverb. Maybe your sister glared sweetly at you over the dinner table as you handed Mom a report card that was better than hers. Maybe Johnny is a toddler discovering the upper range limits of his voice, and his discussion of why he couldn’t have the toy in the checkout line was performed in a glass-shattering, operatic shriek. Used sparingly, descriptors create the images which keep your readers interested and help move the action of your story forward. Overuse feels like a slog through the mud and slows everything down.
As a special bonus, leaving out all those extra words will help you hit your word count!
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